Not a game and a pretty dull movie
First off, label the submission correctly, this wasn't a game but just a movie.
Secondly, while the quality of the animation wasn't terrible, the movie had no suspense or climax. It was simply a guy walking through several doors shooting several others. Try not to keep every encounter repetitive to the next, maybe allow the main character to miss or get struck by a bullet himself.
Keep trying, and maybe make a decent piece for Madness Day which is just on the horizon.
This could have been a lot better.
The movie wasn't terrible, but it was terribly short. I like the style of the movie and even though the animation was basic, it flowed well and worked for the skit. My suggestion is to maybe make five to ten more of these shorts, and then submit them in one Flash. Also, it was a little boring due to the lack of background music, so I would suggest finding some appropriate music for the movie and place it quietly in the background.
Work on what you have already a little bit and I would love to see what else you can come up with.
Ya, I was gonna put some backround music in, but I got lazy and said fuck it.
Am I mistaken?
Or was that audio recorded by Robert Moran of http://www.urealms.com? It would be nice if you gave him some credit. As for the animation, you still have a lot to improve upon, but I have seen much worse.
If you make something worthwhile, then I will be gald to see your work in the Portal.
Quite the Flash to look forward to!
Andrea364, you got your tablet yesterday and you are already pumping out great work! I'm truly impressed that a person your age can animate like this. To Newgrounds you will be a child prodigy if you keep striving towards the goal you are now. If this is what you can do on a tablet, I'm going to be amazed what you can do with a pencil on a piece of paper.
Since this is just a preview, I will say from what I saw that your series is looking to be sinister. The drawn characters are spectacular, and with the lines cleaned up a bit and fully colored, I'd say at age 14-15 you could have a Flash in the Top 50 of all time.
This really should go in the Alpha section of Newgrounds, but then people wouldn't be exposed to your obvious talent. Clean up the lines and color up your final product and I will be sure to watch anything you release.
You are a talented artist, and this Flash was your first tablet product, and it was great! Keep striving and you will be a force to reckon with in the Flash community!
Thanks, half of this was actually done by the mouse, the rest was tablet drawing. As for being fourteen, that will be in 2 years. You are truly flattering me. I rushed this badly so it isn't as good as it should be. Thanks for reviewing!
A Heart-Touching Film
I like the style of the color scheme. Grey, black, and white work great together. The graphics were decent, and it is a nice change from just toilet humor on Newgrounds.
There wasn't too much that I didn't like. It would be nice if there was a little more animation and shading, but besides that, I can't think of anything else.
I liked the movie and it shows that you defiantly have potential! Keep it up.
yeah, i was going to do a little more animation, but i'd only just heard the music and i really wanted to get the whole concept of it down, fast. given more time, im sure , i would have done a better job. also, thanks for the tips, it helps when people say exactly what was wrong/good with your movie.
You have potential.
I think it was cute cartoon. I liked the idea, and the graphics were pretty nifty. I can't really think of something to improve on with that cartoon, since the idea is pretty basic. I hope you decide to make more and soon.
Thank you =)
I think you have potential, so keep up the good work! =)
If you want to stop sounds, use "stopAllSounds();". =)
Great for a first
I like how you had the actual Naruto sounds, and you do show potential. I recommend allowing people to press a button through text, so everyone can read it all.
Keep it up.
This Flash definatly was worth watching with all the comedic humor. The graphics were decent and I commend you with a "Great job!". This goes on my favorites, keep these pumping, David. =)
Thank you very much Pancakes! :D
This is why I love you. Great humor, and it is ORIGINAL! For once, the Portal can be graced with something not-so-mainstream.
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